It fits the tune perfectly. You just have to space it properly. The only part which might not be perfect is the last line and even that can be easily rectified by changing “I’m” to “I am”.
AR (aka DY)
Now I understand why you got thrown out of Brisk? You were probably learning Bava Kamma 11a:
??? ??? ???? ???? ??? ???? ????? ?”? ?????? ?????? ???? ???? ?????? ???? ???? ?? ??? ??????? ??? ?”? ?? ????? ?????? ???? ???? ?????? ??? ???? ???? ??? ???? ??”? ??? ??? ???? ????? ????? ???? ????? ????? ????? ?????
And the oilam was klerring whether it’s a din in the cheftza or the gavra and you said it’s a din in the gavra because ???? rhymes with ????.