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A sudden flash of inspiration! My phone doubles as an excellent camera, and I quickly removed it from my breast pocket, opened the camera app, and snapped a very blurry picture to remind me of the scene later, when I was in a position to turn what I had seen and felt into a story.
It seemed like the old stations used to be, and looking around I almost expected a flickering fluorescent fixture, usually indicating some kind of impending danger and excitement.
I got on the wrong train.
I don’t get it.
If you’re looking for suggestions, I’s suggest changing the tense of the last paragraph to past perfect.
Hmmm…the context seems to suggest that he was about to get on the train, not that he had just gotten off. (That doesn’t really make sense either. Which is why I’m confused.)
I think dash was talking about this paragraph: “I got on the wrong train.”
Oh, that’s good…kind of postmodern (I never get that stuff the first time around). I like.
I had a similar experience on (I think) a 2 train once. Apparently, there are certain lines that have to have narrower cars so they fit through the tunnels on their lines. So they have the new cars, with the blue benches and LED display screens, except the whole interior is slightly different – it’s narrower, the doors aren’t directly opposite each other, the layout of the benches is completely different…it was so surreal.
and finds the scene a bit disorientating
He actually found the scene a bit disorienting.
How do you know what he found? From your screen name it appears that you’re quite a distance away.
“Disorientating” is a real word. It’s an English (British) thing.
soliek: I was referring to ‘haifagirl’, she’s obviously from …
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